BM70622 SITI JUNAINAH BINTI NASRI GEEC1052 COURSEWORK WRITING A NARRATIVE ESSAY - “A REAL FRIEND IS ONE WHO WALKS IN WHEN THE REST OF THE WORLD WALKS OUT”
PRE-WRITING
“A REAL
FRIEND IS ONE WHO WALKS IN WHEN THE REST OF THE WORLD WALKS OUT”
Meaning of the quote:
- A real friend that always stay there beside you in all your ups and downs.
What?
- Friend
that always be by my side when I am in need.
Who?
- My best friend, warden, my dorm mate and I
Where?
- At my
secondary school hostel
When?
- When I was in form three
How?
- My schoolmate accused me of stealing
DRAFTING
When I was in
form three, I was alleged to had stealing money from my doormmate named Alya.
This incident taught me about the real meaning of true friend. This incident takes
place at my school hostel. It all began when all students were directed to go
to the school hall to attended a motivational proram. Unfortunately, I was
unable to attended the program because of menstrual cramps. I was alone in my
dorm and didn’t do nothing, just sleep.
“Juna! Wake
up!”. Alya shouted. I woke up in shock and ask her “What is happening Alya?”.
She then asked me why I am stealing her money with a roug voice. Then, she went
out to reporting to the warden named Mrs Suhaili without giving me a chance to
explain anything. At this point, everybody trust me including Mrs Suhaili.
However, there were one and only person that trust me and she is Aisyah. She
knew that I wouldn’t steal that money. She always remind me to ignore what
people said to me.
One day,
Alya came to me and asked for an apology for accusing me. I wonder why this
happened so sudden. Apparently Aisyah has explained everything to Alya and Mrs
Suhaili. Thank god Aisyah help me to tell the truth about this incident. It
just Aisyah that always there for me
when everyone refused to trusting me.
From this incidents, I started believe that the quote “a real friend is one who walks in when the rest of the world walks out” is right. Aisyah is the one that always support me and giving me advice when I am in trouble while others begin to hate me. She was willing to embarrass herself for me. She taught me what a real friend is all about.
REVISION
When I was
in form three, I was alleged to had (have) stealing (stolen) money from my doormmate (dorm mate) named Alya. This incident taught
me about the real meaning of true friend. This incident takes (took) place at my school hostel. It all began when all
students were directed to go to the school hall to attended
(attend) a motivational proram (program).
Unfortunately, I was unable to attended (attend)
the program because of menstrula cramps. I was alone in my dorm and didn’t do
nothing, just sleep.
“Juna! Wake
up!”. Alya shouted. I woke up in shock and ask her “What is happening Alya?”.
Then she asked me why I am (was) stealing her
money with a roug voice. Then, she went out to reporting
(report) to the warden named Mrs. Suhaili without giving me a chance to explain
anything. At this point, everybody trust (trusts)
me including Mrs Suhaili. However, there were
(was) one and only person that trust (trusted) me
and she is (was) Aisyah. She knew that I
wouldn’t steal that money. She always remind
(reminds) me to ignore what people said (say) to
me.
One day,
Alya came to me and asked for an apology for accusing me. I wonder why this
happened so sudden. Apparently Aisyah has explained everything to Alya and Mrs
Suhaili. Thank god Aisyah help (helped) me to
tell the truth about this incident. It just Aisyah that always there for me when everyone refused to trusting (trust) me.
From this
incidents, I started believe that the quote “a real friend is one who walks in
when the rest of the world walks out” is right. Aisyah is the one that always supporting (supports) and giving
(gives) me advice when I am in trouble while others begin to hate me. She was
willing to embarrass herself for me. She
taugh me what a real friend is all about.
EDITING
When I was
in form three, I was alleged to have stolen money from my dorm mate named Alya.
This incident taught me about the real meaning of true friend. This incident took
place at my school hostel. It all began
when all students were directed to go to the school hall to attend a
motivational program. Unfortunately, I was unable to attend the program because
of menstrula (menstrual) cramps. I was alone in
my dorm and didn’t do nothing (anything), just
sleep.
“Juna! Wake
up!”. Alya shouted. I woke up in shock and ask her “What is happening Alya?”.
Then she asked me why I was stealing her money with a
roug (rough) voice. Then, she went out to report to the warden named
Mrs. Suhaili without giving me a chance to explain anything. At this point, everybody (nobody) trusts me including Mrs Suhaili.
However, there was one and only person that trusted me and she was Aisyah. She
knew that I wouldn’t steal that money. She always reminds me to ignore what
people say to me.
One day,
Alya came to me and asked for an apology for accusing me. I wonder why this
happened so sudden. Apparently Aisyah has explained everything to Alya and Mrs
Suhaili. Thank god Aisyah helped me to tell the truth about this incident. It was just
Aisyah that was always there for me when
everyone refused to trust me.
From this incidents (incident), I started to believe
that the quote “a real friend is one who walks in when the rest of the world
walks out” is right. Aisyah is the one that always supports and gives me advice
when I am in trouble while others begin to hate me. She was willing to embarrass
herself for me. She taugh (taught) me what a real friend is all about.
PUBLISHING
When I was
in form three, I was alleged to have stolen money from my dorm mate named Alya.
This incident taught me about the real meaning of true friends. This incident
took place at my school hostel. It all began when all students were directed to
go to the school hall to attend a motivational program. Unfortunately, I was
unable to attend the program because of menstrual cramps. I was alone in my
dorm and didn’t do anything, just sleep.
“Juna! Wake up!”. Alya shouted. I woke up in
shock and asked her “What is happening Alya?”. Then she asked me why I was
stealing her money with a rough voice. Then, she went out to report to the
warden named Mrs. Suhaili without giving me a chance to explain anything. At
this point, nobody trusts me including Mrs Suhaili. However, there was one and
only person that trusted me and she was Aisyah. She knew that I wouldn’t steal
that money. She always reminds me to ignore what people say to me.
One day, Alya came to me and asked for an
apology for accusing me. I wonder why this happened so sudden. Apparently
Aisyah has explained everything to Alya and Mrs Suhaili. Thank god Aisyah
helped me to tell the truth about this incident. It was just Aisyah that was
always there for me when everyone
refused to trust me.
From this incident, I started to believe
that the quote “a real friend is one who walks in when the rest of the world
walks out” is right. Aisyah is the one that always supports and gives me advice
when I am in trouble while others begin to hate me. She was willing to
embarrass herself for me. She taught me what a real friend is all about.
REFERENCES
https://www.time4writing.com/writing-resources/writing-process/
https://writing.ku.edu/prewriting-strategies
https://mlpp.pressbooks.pub/writingsuccess/chapter/8-3-drafting/
Comments
Post a Comment